Curly - BBiB

It has been a long time since my last post in this forum, and was unsure if to post this as it is not up to the standard of the other work here. But as i am trying to learn I decided to post to see if anyone could help point my production in the right direction.

I will admit there are a few loops in here from sample CD's but i have tried to put enough edits in to make them interesting, and about 50% of the parts are my own. I know if i am to progress that i must move away from these samples or just use them as insperation

thanks in advance for any feedback that you can give me.

http://rapidshare.com/files/207985266/BBiB4320.mp3

upload to somewhere you can stream from mate......7161.com or something.
youl probably get more feedback that way as theres no waiting around for the download.
its pretty much dead in here these days as it is, so an instant listen for feedback is your best bet.

uploaded again, this time to a streaming site


[URL="http://www.7161.com/streamer.cfm?filename_audio=DT_ACF22161992568.mp3& dt_track_id=17496"]http://www.7161.com/streamer.cfm?filename_audio=DT_ACF22161992568.mp3& dt_track_id=17496[/URL

those links are not correct for some reason mate?

click on your track name on 7161.com, no need to sign in......then copy link from stream or download option.

On the download mate, ignore Siege! He's an inpatient bastard!! ;-)

I like it, nice use of panning! Lets all the elements have their own space...

I feel that the kick could do with a bit more grunt, but that's just personal preference.

Also like the electroish synths that come in later, sounds good.

Thanks for listening. The comment about the kicks has been taken on board, and I will rework them, have learnt alot about kicks trying to write "1 night in ...@". so will go back and use some of my new found knoledge.

anyway I hope this is the new link, looks like a double post of the link last time, sorry about that.

http://www.7161.com/streamer.cfm?fil...track_id=17496

Only on pc speakers but sounds very dry, get some more reverb on things,especially that clap.
sounds like it needs filling up in the mid to low mid region, maybe bring that synth stab at 4.12 in a lot earlier, nearer the begining so its more constant?

id try get a solid groove running throughout and then all your other sounds can sit around that.

Thanks siege for taking the time to listen, i will rework this over the weekend.

reworked this, changed the arrangement, tougherned up the kick, and remixed down, this time with more FX.

Stream
http://www.7161.com/streamer.cfm?fil...track_id=17522

Download
http://213.129.73.14/users_audio/157...F117497736.mp3