hmm
well, really to get a good idea of this, I`d need to look at it through a spectra
But your general eq needs loads of work.
this gets quite intense after the break, but is let down by bad eq.
Ok, that kick is very mid range
So you can afford to jam some rumbley sub under it, cos there is no bottom end to this tune.
The mid range is very empty, so wack some percussion loops in there to fill the space.
Erm, really you need to strip down the tunes you make, and learn to see into your audio. Work out what frequncies aren`t being covered.
Make more comparisons between stuff you really like.
keep at it dude;)