I like the premise of it. I think a few more hours of work on it and it can be a serious tune, What I don't like is that I feel the pad needs more attention to detail. maybe delay or reverb. Otherwise right now it's not strong enough for my liking to be a key element to the track. It also needs a hat on the third measure to give it a lil bit more jackability for the dancefloor sound it has now. Otherwise I like the idea you have going on behind this and please don't think I am being overly critical ;)