To be honest Jim, this sounds like every other d'n'b track I've heard, which could be deemed a good or bad thing, depending on perspective. I'll be honest - I don't like the genre at all, but what u've laid out seems to be along the right lines, and production is good as always.

What I think u've got goin for u is u're techno perspective on things, which I don't think comes across in this track, and I reckon u need to utilise that angle in what u're doin here, in order to be an innovator (I know u're capable) rather than a fodder follower.

I'm definitley no expert in this area of music, and so won't comment on structure of the tune etc, but it does sound like d'n'b, but not really Jim Fish d'n'b (if u see what I mean?!).