i'll have to listen again l8r but at first listens, you've defo made it sound better. don't really know 100% until i listen to it @ night... if anything, the lyric may seem to go on a little too much now. it seems like when everything comes back in after the break, you're sort of expecting it to go and come back in l8r. but it doesn't - it carries on. and that could be boring on the dancefloor????? i know you change the actual words but the feel is stil the same cause of the way the voice whispers. and you might not hear that so well on the dancefloor. i would do another mix too of this with an ever so slight bit less vocal just to be safe. one with no vocal too so you can add it l8r if you f*** up????????????? i dunno, it's just a suggestion... it's always best to be safe than sorry in these situations and have all angles covered....