I like the ideas in here - pretty cool. It's a bit loopy for my taste (as you said) but you can sort it out I'm sure :)


One thing that caught my ear -
The change around :54 or so that drops in is sorta awkward due to the way your patterns are setup... its managable but sounds funny at first.


I see what you're going for though.. good effort. I think if you make 3-4 more layers you will find that it will be enough to take bits of them here and there and spread them around so that it becomes less loopy... drop em in a for a few bars and then go back to what you already have.. spice it up a bit.
Also you don't have to use another layer of pattern - try effecting just one element of the track for a while and such.

Also I do like the feedback synth type sound near the end I'd try using that more and maybe drop into a breakdown with it!

Just some ideas ;)