As a tune this works quite well.

PRoduction wise your gonna have to work real hard.
Everything sounds very muted, this is probably dure to compression and distortion.
There`s no real depth or bass in there.
And the top end kind of sits in the very high mid, and goe`s no higher.
The empshasis has changed since the original and is dominated by the kick, so the groove doesn`t really work too well.
If you really want your kick to be the main feature, then it needs to be much crisper as right now it is pretty dull, due to the distorion.