not bad, needs to a fair whack deeper tho, both the bass and the kick, u might be better changing the kick for one that compliments the other elements a bit better

wasnt keen on that hoover at all unfortunately, but thats definately personal taste, its a cheap and nasty, and horrifically overused sound, there has been the odd exception "Mills - UFO" but barring that hoovers belong in the bin

not a bad start