Awesome intro.
Yeah, I like this but it definitely needs work.
There`s a lot of imbalance between the various elements.
None of the percussion at present really plays off against the kick, in terms of size of sound. So this feels very bottom heavy.
Maybe put in a sound or beef up a sound that plays off against the kick, so that there is more balance to the groove.
The main body of percussion sits in the mid to high-mid/top area, so there is a big gap in the mid to high bass region that leaves the tune feeling a little thin.
Some good solid clonks or beefy synth chord stabs (dischordant would be nice) in the low mid region would do this a world of good.
Also some element to add a bit more drive and direction to this would be nice to take it away from being a straight drum track.
Nice edits through this.