Well I have tryed to take the advise given here on board.

I have done the following.

Sidechaned the bass to a kick.
Reduced the hats in level.
Eq,ed the ride so it cuts through the mix better.
EQ,ed the pads to unclutter the mids.
EQ,ed the Synth line so it sits better.

I still need to work on some edits for the percussion

anyway do you think that this is an improvment

http://www.studio61.org/tunes/EndOfSummerPT2.mp3