Cool hard track, loads of nice scapes and sounds. All the elements in hear have been chosen well, and the track has a nice full on take on the minimal ambient techno sound.

Starts off with a nice solid kick, but it quickly gets buried under the noise and ambient samples.
I think the main problem that holds this back from being a pro track is all the clutter.
I think take everything back to the kick and basic beat and then slowly build the parts up, around the kick.
Some of the big ambient sounds and pads could do with better use of subtractive. Pull out the bass frequencies and some areas of the low mid and maybe sculpt the mid range a bit, so they interweave rather than all sit in the same place.
The hats especially get lost in all the lush washes of sound.
The problem with this kind of wall of sound intense techno is that you (we, us) tend to get precious over every single element, when really you need a more objective view on them, as not everything can be full and in your face.

I`d say after a good break from this you might be able to go back in and get a bit more clinical with it, as you will have a little bit of personal detatchment from it.

Interesting stuff though, very sci-fi and different to most of the hard techno kicking about right now.