the actual track i found quite plain for this style of techno, needs alot more going on and alot more interesting changes to carry it off. The Vocal sample doesnt really go too well either, sounds like an old BBC education broadcast or something.

production wise, sorry needs a fair bit i thought, alot more EQ needed to seperate the elements, really could do with widening the frequency spectrum more id say. More processing overall definately, such as verbs and compression, and as i said some good EQ work. Could really do with a bassline in there too, as it just feels like the listener's waiting for something to kick when it doesnt, and this kind of techno really needs something else to carry it along, a banging kick just doesnt do. Also i dont think the timing's correct on the small breakdown around the 3 min mark where its just the bass and a hat playing

good start though