Purely from a listeners point of view, I think you use some good industrial style sounds. Rhythm reminds me of surgeon, though doesn't sound like a surgeon track (if that makes sense). Sounds good. dark which I like ands the track certainly does build well with some pretty intense moments. I think the kick drum could have a slightly fatter/deeper sound though maybe it's sounding a bit quick due to my audio player on my machine playing tunes slightly fast for some reason??!!!? Nice vocal samples which add to the darker feel and energy of it. Overalll i like though could be more polished in places such as bass drum's hi hats etc.

Good effort.