[Hard Trance] any feedback appreciated

[Dave Elyzium]

I'm in the middle of writing a fast freeform style trancer and i've upped a 2 minute mp3 of what i have so far...would love to hear where you think i should go with this track! or should I just bin it and smack myself in the face for being so lame??

to listen click the link below its the first song called "Untitled" !!

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/3/daveelyziummusic.htm

[EmotionComplex]

like this mate, would be nice if it went into edm style choir riff but perhaps that would be too predictible, soudning good upto now but perhaps think of somethin unusal to add to it to grab peoples attention :)

[Jay M]

I will let Marc Smith have a listen m8,then tell ya what he thinks

[Dave Elyzium]

EC: yeah i was thinking of doing that but as you said it is a bit predictable (and a bit boring for me at the moment!) def needs something different like you said then work between the two elements, ie the hoovery intro you listened to and the big main riff for example....what you reckon?

jay: wow thanks mate keep me posted on that one! :)

[synergydubs]

a good start to a track there. from what ive heard i could play that in both my hard trance and freeform sets.

Get it finished and then get a link up, Im very curious to see how it ends up like!