Can't comment on the mixdown Jack Jack, but man sounds really nice with what you've done so far in my humble opinion. Would be a really wikked Club techno sort of tune for sure. Rock all sorts of crowds with that sound.
Guess maybe just a couple of intelligent edits here and there will really tie this one together amigo. Couple little filter edits maybe here and there to the whole drum sequence...or maybe a little filter on the bass/synth noise coming out of the break....maybe slice and dice that little edit or something too. Would give just that touch more dynamics to the tune I think. (That seems to be the case with a few of your tunes that I heard)
In general though homie, nice little tribal techno rocker this is. Just needs a few little touches edit wise to make it shine like the diamond it is capable of being.