I very much like the ideas of this track and the overall vibe
(witch is quite depressing but I like that)
The background sounds I like as they are what more or less give the
track its feel.
I would personaly have some more percussion in there to push the groove on.
Im not saying go mad with percussion just to have some sounds that stay in
keeping with whats allready there and add a bit more drive or groove.
Production wise the main point I notice is the balance of the mix
could be much better(regarding volumes)
I think either the kick is too loud or the other sounds are not loud enough
Depending on what kind of headroom you have left I would turn
the other sounds up or the kick down.
You dont have to turn everything up just cetain elements that can be the
focal points of the track.
Interesting stuff for sure tho dude.