Great ideas, nice and deep, and I love the blippy percussion, it's got real potential, me likey.

I'll agree with the general concensus that it needs a few more elements, maybe a lush pad faintly in the background, and a few atmospherics.. I'd try and get that bass a little more under control as well, sounds great but my poor monitors were wobbling about like a jelly pudding on top of a 100k rig..