not bad at all for a beginner (and dont think ime belittling you cause ime a relative noob myself :cheese: )
I think the kick has far too much bottom end and its dominating the rest of the track too much. also try using EQ to cut the bottom of your higher placed sounds (i.e. your ride cymbals and hats etc)
like the pads around 7:30 ish (reminds me of some of the stuff mzone plays) but again EQ your different elements.
maybe introduce a different synth to compliment the melody at some point as well and if your sequencer allows it try automating some parameters on your vst's (assuming your using vst's of course)