Nice.
I`d just deal with the composition as it is rather than start speeding it up and changing it all etc.
the elements all work together and if you start ****ing with that you might destroy it.

I like the overall feel, very spaceous, austere, bleak. Very nice.
Maybe just strengthen the groove by adding a nice percussive counterpoint to the kick, as the space between the kicks doesn`t quite roll comfortably.

As you said, just use your better production knowledge to clean this up, add more weight to some of the sounds (there is a rather glaring gap in the mid range that nothing really seems to settle in) and use some nicer verbs and this is good to go as a good house/prog/tech house chuggernaught.