Well, my honest opinion?
Who cares what other people think about the tune in temrs of like and dislike? Do it for yourself, not everything needs to be something to send to a record label (far too many people think everything they do should be sent to a label, and have no idea of personal quality control).

As for the tune.
I fecking love it.
the feel, the melody and the overall fragility and sentiment pushes all my buttons.
It`s nice to hear something tender coming from an artist. As especially in techno, a lot of people just seem to be trying to prove who can be the hardest *yawn*, so it shows you have a deep emotional pallette.

Production wise, I think the kicks are a little too strong on their own. Something of equal weight needs to be used as a counterpoint to balance against the kicks, as otherwise everything draws too much in the kicks favour.
Either that or use a more subtle kick.

The snare could have a little more top end sparkle.

Bring up the synths a little, as it is they that carry this tune.

The hats also need more volume and sparkle to counter the kick.

It`s early days, but yes, you should continue on with this, I guess you could call IDM tune.
I for one would be very interested in this tune, although if you intend to submit it to my label (I`d like you to, when it is done) please don`t post any further versions up in the public domain.