Interesting.
I like it, very clunky.

Production needs a lot of polish.
thos emain metal sounds could do with a bit of verb to blend them into the mix more nicely.
I`d maybe add a lott more top end percussion to juxtapose against the kick as well, as this is bottom heavy.

Some more interesting elemtns or hooks would be nice too, as interest starts to wane after a minute or so.

Interesting for a first outing though.