ok.. i know you dont produce much danny so ill be harsh just cause you're a cunt!!!

hahaha.. only kiddin.

*tune
the overall idea is good. i like the idea with the little stops on the piano riff. it could do with more variation on the hats and kick drum. also needs more percussion. not a bad effort though.

*sound
firstly you need to upload in better quality as its impossible to judge at that bitrate. there does seem to be some weird phasing issues with the kick - have you layered a few differant kicks without eqing them to eliminate phase? mid range is non-existant. percussion will beef that up for you. sub needs something too as the kick is coming across quite honky

what monitors are you using or is it stereo speakers?

anyway for your 2nd tune its a good effort - you know where to go and you understand the structure parts, you just need to put the head down and learn to get you to the next level.