My 1st track, go easy...

[rhythmtech]

hey fil,

first thing that stands out at me is the crash at the start of every bar. you need to lose that and just use it to emphasise the start of a new passage really, otherwise it just becomes very nagging.

your melodays need work as every seperate melody seems based around one note. try to vary the pitches a lot more.

automate the synths to add more flavour to the elements - eg the frequency cut-off, the attack, the sustain etc. changing all these elements bring more movement to a tune.

i wont go into the engineering side yet as its best to learn about composition before you start getting into the technical side of things.

all in all keep trying. single out an element in your track (ie: synth) and compare it to the synth in a track that you know. listen to how the differant movements affect the overall feel of the track.

good luck.. its a very long but pleasing road.